Script Development

Making a script

Never include camera directions in a script.

The script should use clear and concise wording to convey to a driector your intent.

Directors can infer camera from words: for example, "Bart's eye twitches" already implies a close-up to be a able to see the action.

Avoid "we see" or "the camera sees"

No inner thoughts or feelings just action, POV, sound, atmosphere.

A slash is used to concatenate flow between two areas.

Treatment feedback

• Explore alternate conclusions to the story

• Use the mirror as a metaphor, snippets of activities

• Imagine a pull focus from an active day, through the mirror to the void - with Celia looking looking back in, frail.

The Voicemail Notes

Benjamin, it's Nan. 

I just wanted to say I saw Elizabeth earlier and she asked after you.

I told her three doors down they're half the price and Janet still wouldn't believe me. Oh the look on her face when I walked out of there. You should've seen it! 

Please come and join me, there's more than enough for two.

I have to go now, dinner is ready. I'll leave a plate for you.

DRAFT THREE / Alternative

Looking at an alternative ending, where Celia does not recognise her grandson. Slightly more heartbreaking but not my original idea. Can I add this version as an alternative?